Sunday, August 12, 2018

New Colossus, With Corrections for the MAGA era


Not like the brazen giant of Greek [M1]  fame,
With conquering limbs astride from land to land;
Here at our sea-washed, sunset gates shall stand
A mighty woman[M2]  with a torch, whose flame
Is the imprisoned lightning, and her name
Mother of Exiles[M3] . From her beacon-hand
Glows world-wide welcome[M4] ; her mild eyes command
The air-bridged harbor that twin cities frame.
"Keep ancient lands, your storied pomp[M5] !" cries she
Send these, the homeless[M7] , tempest-tost to me,
I lift my lamp beside the golden door!"





 [M1] Greece is too socialist, use another country


 [M2] Women should be nurturing and loving, change to "caring woman"


 [M3] Sounds too much like "immigrants", change to "Citizens"


 [M4] This is Globalism, which is almost Socialism. Change it to "USA-wide welcome"


 [M5] This implies that pomp is bad, and President Trump likes pomp. Please replace with something else that we don't like about Europe, like, say "Socialized Medicine"


 [M6] The entire piece needs to be changed. Please replace with something like "Give me your your educated, your rich, your wealthy businessmen yearning for lower taxes, the affluent few of your most exclusive coastal villas".


 [M7] This may imply that we should take care of homeless, who, as we know, have only themselves to blame. Change to "Homeowners"

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